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假定你是李華,希望通過(guò)外籍教師Peter找一位英語(yǔ)筆友。請寫(xiě)一封短信,描述一下你理想中筆友的條件,并說(shuō)明為什么選這樣的筆友。具體條件包括:
年齡;
性別;
愛(ài)好(旅游、運動(dòng)、寵物等)。
注意:
1.詞數100左右;
2.可以適當增加細節;
3.開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好。
Dear Peter,
I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.
Best regards,
滿(mǎn)分文(一)
Dear Peter,
I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.
Since Im quite interested in English, I would like to make an English pen friend to improve my writing. Can you introduce one to me? My ideal pen friend should be of my age, and a boy will be better. A boy who likes traveling and football will be a good candidate.
In my opinion, the guy of my age will share almost the same experiences as me and it is easier to talk to each other. We can share our feelings of traveling and football. If possible, I hope that he likes pets. Hope you can find me an ideal pen friend.Thank you.
Best regards,
Li Hua
名師點(diǎn)評:
本文屬于比較“平”的文章,即穩中求勝。文章沒(méi)有華麗的詞語(yǔ),但是使用了一些短語(yǔ)和結構,能夠獲得老師的欣賞。首句是個(gè)原因狀語(yǔ)從句。文章也運用了定語(yǔ)從句來(lái)修飾boy,比較好。If possible這個(gè)省略句則表明作者對這類(lèi)狀語(yǔ)從句的熟悉。
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好詞:1. candidate n.候選人2.share with 與…分享
好句:In my opinion, the guy of my age will share almost the same experiences as me and it is easier to talk to each other.在我看來(lái),像我這樣年齡的男生和我會(huì )有更多的共同語(yǔ)言。
Dear Peter,
I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.
I have been learning English for two years and I hope to find an English pen friend so that I can get more improvement. Can you help me to find one?
Id like to have a boy, who is of my age and is fond of traveling and sports, to be my pen friend. In my opinion, people of the same age often have something to exchange. Thats why I want him to be of my age. If he likes doggy, that would be better because I can tell him something about my little doggy.Id be very thankful if you can help me. Hope to hear from you!
Best regards,
Li Hua
名師點(diǎn)評:
從整體上來(lái)說(shuō),本文寫(xiě)得還是符合要求的,內容完整,要點(diǎn)和結構也很齊全。語(yǔ)言的使用不在于華麗的辭藻而在于其一些復雜句子的組織。最值得我們學(xué)習的就是像好詞和好句中列舉的表達法。全文流暢而連貫,適合于模仿。
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好詞1.improvement n 改進(jìn)2.do sb. a favor 幫助某人3. doggy n.小狗
好句1. Id like to have a boy, who is of my age and is fond of traveling and sports, to be my pen friend.我想尋找一個(gè)和我年紀相仿,喜歡旅游、體育的男孩來(lái)做我的筆友。
好處:of my age 年紀相仿;be fond of 喜歡。
2.Thats why I want him to be of my age,這就是為什么我希望筆友跟我年紀相仿的原因。
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一家賓館新開(kāi)業(yè),為吸引外國賓客,希望在互聯(lián)網(wǎng)上進(jìn)行宣傳,請你用英語(yǔ)為其寫(xiě)一篇文字介紹。主要內容應該包括:
地點(diǎn):距白山入口處500米;
房間及價(jià)格:?jiǎn)稳碎g(共20間),100元/天;
雙人間(共15間),150元/天;
熱水淋??;
餐飲:餐廳(中、西餐),咖啡廳(茶、咖啡);
游泳池:全天免費開(kāi)放;
歡迎預定。
注意:
詞數100左右,開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好;
可適當增加細節,以使行文連貫。
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
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Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides singleperson room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 doubleperson rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
名師點(diǎn)評:
本文開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山,首先點(diǎn)明了主旨。本文最大的特點(diǎn)是應用了很多比較復雜的句式,使文章比較出彩。開(kāi)頭使用了獨立結構交代賓館位置。which引導的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句的使用也很正確??偟貋?lái)說(shuō),文章句式精煉,是篇不錯的滿(mǎn)分作文。
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好詞1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利
好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable.
所有這些服務(wù)都會(huì )給你帶來(lái)便利,并且非常的愉快。
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. There are two kinds of rooms for service: singleperson room, 20 in total and RMB 100 yuan per day and doubleperson room, 15 in total and RMB 150 yuan per day. The hot water bath is provided as well. We serve both Chinses and western food in the restaurant as well as coffee and tea in the cafe. All are provided in a short time. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come.
We accept booking rooms ahead of time. So come and enjoy!
名師點(diǎn)評:
本文敘述比較詳細,使用了比較復雜的句式和短語(yǔ)。首句的伴隨狀語(yǔ)用得很好。在介紹房間類(lèi)型時(shí),作者使用了簡(jiǎn)短的對比句式,很精煉。作者還使用了定語(yǔ)從句which,同時(shí)在描述酒店的兩種價(jià)格的時(shí)候也很恰當,語(yǔ)句生動(dòng)而不重復。
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好詞1. sightseeing n.觀(guān)光旅游2. book v.登記;預訂
好句1. The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. 賓館在距離白山入口處500米的地方,這對于參觀(guān)白山來(lái)說(shuō)是一個(gè)很方便的位置。
好處:伴隨狀語(yǔ)的使用很到位。
2. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come.
游泳池全天免費開(kāi)放。
好處:which引導了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。
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