2009年6月英語(yǔ)四級考前熱點(diǎn)高分范文(一)
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion? You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)有的人喜歡獨自旅行，有的人喜歡與別人結伴而行
2)兩種旅行方式的好處
3)你更喜歡哪種旅行方式，為什么?
Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion?
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行文思路
本題屬于提綱式文字命題。提綱第1點(diǎn)指出兩種不同的旅行方式，提綱第2點(diǎn)要求分別闡述兩種旅行方式的好處，提綱第3點(diǎn)要求表明“我”的傾向，由此可判斷本文應為對比選擇型作文。
根據所給提綱，本文應包含如下內容：指出人們對旅行方式的不同偏好：有人喜歡獨自旅行，有人喜歡結伴旅行;對比闡述獨自旅行和結伴旅行各自的好處;表明“我”更喜歡于哪種旅行方式，并說(shuō)明理由。
高分范文
Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion?
[1]When it comes to traveling way, different people will offer different opinions. [2]Some people like to travel alone, [2]while others prefer to travel with a companion. [3]Of course, everyone has his consideration for his preference.
[4]Traveling alone, one can enjoy more freedom. The traveler can arrange his tour as he wishes without the trouble of humoring others. [3]Moreover, traveling alone [5]tend to bring the traveler [6]unexpected surprise, [7]such as making a new friend and enjoying a different scenery. [8]Compared with traveling alone, traveling with a companion has also its advantages. [3]For one thing, the group members can help and look after each other in the journey. [3]For another, [4]traveling with others who have same interest with, you can share costs and experiences with them.
[9]As to me, I prefer to travel with a companion. [3]Firstly, we can deal with the possible problems and difficulties in the journey. [3]Secondly, I like to share the pleasure of traveling with others. [3]In sum, [10]both traveling alone and traveling with a companion have their attractions, and you can find the pleasure from either one.
【亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評】
[1]“當涉及到或談到…時(shí)”。
[2]用于提出兩種不同的觀(guān)點(diǎn)、態(tài)度或喜好。
[3]過(guò)渡銜接詞語(yǔ)，使文章條理清晰、銜接緊密。
[4]現在分詞短語(yǔ)作伴隨狀語(yǔ)。
[5]“傾向，趨于”。
[6]“意外的驚喜”。
[7]表示列舉。
[8]“和…相比”。
[9]用于引出自己的觀(guān)點(diǎn)或選擇。
[10]“或者…，或者”。
佳句臨摩
1.佳句：When it comes to traveling way, different people will offer different opinions.
臨摩：當談到是否應該取消“黃金周”假期時(shí)，人們的看法各不相同。
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2.佳句：Compared with traveling alone, traveling with a companion has also its advantages.
臨摩：和城市相比，鄉村的經(jīng)濟相對落后。
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3.佳句：Both traveling alone and traveling with a companion have their attractions, and you can find the pleasure from either one.
臨摩：網(wǎng)絡(luò )教學(xué)和傳統教學(xué)都有其各自的優(yōu)點(diǎn)，因此，我們應該將二者相結合。
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【KEY】
1. When it comes to whether we should cancel the “golden week” holiday, different people will offer different opinions.
2. Compared with the cities, the countryside is relatively backward in economy.
3. Both network teaching and traditional school teaching have their advantages. Therefore, we should combine these two teaching ways.
